My Irritations, Aggravations and Inspirations

July 5, 2010 “Surrender”

The Perfect Poet Award week 24

Thanks to Jingle for this award…I can count myself among some very good poets.

This week I nominate this wonderfully witty and whimsical piece by my very good friend, Amanda: MR NAILGUN (2)

July 5, 2010   “Surrender”

Sleep eludes me
She mocks me with heavy eyes
Sleep, from just off the edge of my bed
denudes me
Sleep taunts me with glimpses
in minuscule dozes
and starts me the moment
my longing eye closes
first on one side
then on the other
on the outside
then under the cover
like a cruel master of me
deprives me that thing
She knows I can’t see
She knows I can’t have it
in the waking of the day
it can only be found
when thoughts drift away
in dreams of my lover
my heart doesn’t pound
in my chest
I’m at rest
peace can be found
Evil Bitch
Succubus Queen
holds heaven and hell
and me in between…

my eyes start to close
in restful repose
as I surrender
and make no more stand
slipping into her green pools
as I take my Love’s han…

TLH 7/4/2010
Just Say’n

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19 responses

  1. Such beautiful imagery..(made me smile) I am always so excited to see what you come up with next and you never ever fail to take my breath away. Thanks so much for nominating me..I am honored and proud. ~ Red

    July 4, 2010 at 11:48 am

    • Thanks, Red, I will do my best to keep stealing your breath 🙂

      Your poem is a wonderfully good piece…I’m very glad to nominate it.
      Just Say’n

      July 5, 2010 at 12:08 am

  2. Janessa

    Love love love this. Constantly amazed at how varied your writing can be and in all it’s forms still has me completely hooked. Really enjoyed this one my dear. Love ya!

    July 4, 2010 at 7:01 pm

    • Thank You, Janessa, for being such a fan, and a friend 🙂

      When can we see some of your poetry on here? 🙂

      Just Say’n

      July 5, 2010 at 12:10 am

      • Janessa

        Lol….you know I’m a bit shy about that. Perhaps someday 🙂

        July 5, 2010 at 4:23 am

  3. excellent nomination,
    beautiful poem,
    your words never fail, it is such a thrill to discover your talent and share with others…

    rock on!

    July 4, 2010 at 11:52 pm

    • Jingle…your blog is the reason I’m getting so into poetry. Being a part of your Rallies is inspiring. Thank You!

      Tracy H

      PS…YOU ROCK ON! 🙂

      July 5, 2010 at 12:14 am

  4. LOL…I love how you ended the poem like you slept off…that’s real talent man.
    I have know this feeling very well. nicely written. Stay cool my good friend.


    July 5, 2010 at 2:57 am

    • Thanks Much,my friend. Rally On!!

      July 5, 2010 at 9:33 pm

  5. lifeinarecipe

    Your sleepless night inspired a wonderful poem! A pretty good trade off from my point of view, but then I was not the one tossing and turning…slept like a lamb I did. I hope for your efforts you are rewarded with a good sleep tonight!

    July 5, 2010 at 1:56 pm

    • Thank you for reading, and for the kind words. I’m glad you enjoy my work in the Great White North. I enjoy yours as well.

      “YAWN” 🙂
      Tracy H

      July 5, 2010 at 9:37 pm


    three poetry awards,
    two general awards…

    July 5, 2010 at 3:29 pm

    • Jingle…again, YOU ROCK! Thank you very much 🙂

      Rally On!!!

      July 5, 2010 at 9:38 pm

  7. oh be careful playing with that fire…smiles. love the cut off at teh end there as well dramatic…

    July 5, 2010 at 5:54 pm

    • Indeed, my friend, I have too many burn scars as it is. Thanks for reading 🙂

      Rally On!

      July 5, 2010 at 9:39 pm

  8. LOVED THIS! Sleep can definitely be a bitch when she eludes you 😉 Brought a smile to my face and a chuckle … thanks!

    July 5, 2010 at 7:05 pm

    • 🙂 Thanks for the kudos, and for taking the time to read…Kudos to you!

      Rally On!

      July 5, 2010 at 9:41 pm

  9. When sleep eludes the muse engages … and how fortunate for the rest of us. Hope you catch up though …

    July 5, 2010 at 8:43 pm

    • Again, Thank You, Jamie 🙂 for your time and comment.

      Rally On!
      Tracy H

      July 5, 2010 at 9:42 pm

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