My Irritations, Aggravations and Inspirations

July 22, 2010 “Thursday Poets Rally”

“Dying Teardrops”

As I stand dying
Heart bleeding teardrops of red
I hear no crying

As I kneel dying
Ashen face with tearless eyes
I hear no sighing

As I lay dying
In sanguine pool of heartbreak
I see her flying

Listen to this here:
© Tracy H

(I borrowed the photo from the artist)

Thanks, Amanda

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25 responses

  1. a sad but beautiful creation! happy rally!

    http://pinklady-bing.blogspot.com/2010/07/note-to-my-child.html

    July 22, 2010 at 6:16 am

  2. Well done. It’s a shame how relationships can be soooo one-sided.

    Regards…

    July 22, 2010 at 7:32 am

    • Thank you for reading…and for understanding the thought.

      Tracy H

      July 22, 2010 at 12:18 pm

  3. apt one,
    nice to see you in!
    😉

    July 22, 2010 at 1:43 pm

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  5. Doni Cifra

    harsh, unrequited love is.
    and so concentrated in this work of yours.

    congratulations tracy.

    loved your reading too

    July 22, 2010 at 2:14 pm

  6. This really encapsulates what heartache is all about. As always, you have put out a most exceptionally brilliant poem – as only YOU can!! ~ Hugs. Red x

    July 22, 2010 at 2:54 pm

    • Thank you, Red. In my world your comments mean so much.
      Cowboy 😉

      July 22, 2010 at 3:12 pm

      • It’s all worth a song Cowboy 🙂

        July 22, 2010 at 3:15 pm

  7. joanny

    Tender, touching and poignant poem.

    Sad but beautiful.

    Joanny

    July 22, 2010 at 3:21 pm

  8. the ending is cool, you see her flying while you are dying, freaking fabulous feelings there…

    I marked you down as done,
    BEST!
    u rock 2!
    😉

    July 22, 2010 at 3:29 pm

  9. Ow!!! Such a sad sight…
    But I loved your usage of rhyme.. you’ve done it so neatly here!
    AWESOME! And the image was befitting the poem – to the core!!

    July 22, 2010 at 3:30 pm

  10. Beautifully wrought poem . . . both poem and illustration are stunning, evocative . . . wish I could say I don’t know from unrequited love! We all know though . . . Sad . . .

    July 22, 2010 at 4:17 pm

  11. I tend to see things literally, so I see this as speaking of the loneliness of dying. Well written even if that’s not what you were aiming for!

    July 22, 2010 at 4:55 pm

  12. Filled with sadness and pain, your words pierced through and i can really feel it, wonderful poem with a in-depth dark feel, thank for sharing and have a great week ahead:)

    July 22, 2010 at 5:27 pm

  13. wow the dichotomy between the two hearts is brutal…but it happens.

    July 22, 2010 at 6:30 pm

  14. Very sad, but lovely piece. Great work!

    July 23, 2010 at 12:37 am

  15. My entry was the beginning and yours was the end, a tragic one at that.

    http://keshavnarla.wordpress.com/2010/04/25/just-3-words/

    Short and simple as death itself!

    July 23, 2010 at 4:51 am

  16. I was watching 300 last night and saw a man decapitated. First he stood, then he kneeled, and lastly he laid. Heartless not headless, you have captured to falling of a body, the removal of life from a body with perfection. My favorite line is “Heart bleeding teardrops of red” because of your different use of the word teardrop. I can’t remember when the last time I have read a teardrop being used as a shape. Short and powerful, this was a great read!

    July 23, 2010 at 3:06 pm

  17. All three of these verses are fantastic
    You prove that sometimes less is more

    July 23, 2010 at 3:36 pm

  18. So sad. But well written. 🙂

    July 24, 2010 at 6:41 pm

  19. belladonna23

    simple and lovely. i connect with its meanings

    July 27, 2010 at 6:20 pm

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  21. who is she? Did she stab you?

    I loved this!

    August 5, 2010 at 12:50 pm

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