My Irritations, Aggravations and Inspirations

September 1, 2010 “missing my love”

For One Shot Wednesday

“missing my love”

the gloomy gloom glooming
of the dim doom dooming
from sad tears tearing
up my eye
like
the drip-drip-dripping
of the raindrops dropping
from grey clouds clouding
up my sky
as
the tick-tock-tocking
of my heartbeats knocking
from my heart’s lock locking
up my pain
til
the click-click-clicking
of my heart’s lock picking
from my love’s love drying
up my rain

©tlh   9/1/2010

Listen to this here:

(Image courtesy of mightywhisk @photobucket)

Thanks, Red

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36 responses

  1. Dear Tracy,
    I was listening to your poem with my daughter next to me. And both of us loved the cadence of your poem.

    I’ve cookied it – it’s so pretty aand such a delight to listen to and read.

    September 1, 2010 at 12:09 am

    • Thank you very much 🙂 I’m very pleased that you like my reading (he blushes). Your visit and comments are much appreciated.

      September 1, 2010 at 12:20 am

  2. i can feel the pitter patter of the raindrops in you words tracy…there is a nice rhythm to this…happy oneshot!

    September 1, 2010 at 12:25 am

    • Thank you very much, Brian. I really enjoy Oneshot 🙂

      September 1, 2010 at 12:30 am

  3. I could hear the droplets fall, I could hear the heartbeat…and you reading it, made it so real!! Brilliant One Shot Cowboy…but then, you never ever disappoint!!

    September 1, 2010 at 12:37 am

    • You’re just the tops in my book, Red. Thank you for always being so kind. You are the one who never ever disappoints. 🙂

      September 1, 2010 at 12:45 am

  4. Oh, I really like this one. The “heart’s lock locking” mingled in with the rain was great. Good One Shot!

    Feel free to come over and check out my poem, Just a Farmer at http://bit.ly/aMQO5K, and let me know what you think.

    September 1, 2010 at 3:24 am

    • Thanks for your time and comments; I’m very glad you came by my little world. I enjoyed your One Shot as well 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 8:57 pm

  5. Desiree

    This one is gorgeous..!

    September 1, 2010 at 4:45 am

    • Thank you, My Dear, and thanks for stopping in to read…it means a lot to me for sure 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 8:58 pm

  6. Okay, I know I’ve got Bob Dylan on the brain at the moment, but I can totally see this being a song sung by him, Tracy. Brilliant! 😀

    September 1, 2010 at 5:18 am

    • Ah, Tony, stop toying with me so…Bob Dylan? 🙂 Thank you, My Friend, for your kind comments and great sense of humor; I always enjoy them both very much.

      September 2, 2010 at 9:04 pm

  7. Lovely+
    Amazing blog I’ve found here… As I cannot find any followers list I’ll keep you at my sidebar…

    🙂

    Pleased to ‘meet’ you!

    Dulce

    September 1, 2010 at 6:42 am

    • It is my pleasure to have you come and visit my little blog; Thank You for your kind comment, too. I have no followers button 😦 I do have one that allows you to get email updates on my postings. I am very pleased to meet you as well 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 9:07 pm

  8. I enjoyed this poem so much. It has such a wonderful rhythm that just suits the subject matter perfectly.

    September 1, 2010 at 6:58 am

    • 🙂 Thank you very much 🙂 I’m very pleased that you came and gave me a bit of your time to read and comment 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:09 pm

  9. LOVEly poem!

    September 1, 2010 at 9:10 am

    • Thank You 🙂 I’m glad to have you stop by and read. I hope you’ll come back often.

      September 2, 2010 at 10:12 pm

  10. Id say you’ve written this poem in a very interesting pattern.. very delightful to read 🙂

    September 1, 2010 at 9:17 am

    • Thanks, Ilakya…your comments are always wanted…mostly because they are so kind 😉 Cheers, my Romantic friend 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:14 pm

  11. wow – great wordplay tracy – it’s just such a smooth read – and every line tells that you miss her

    September 1, 2010 at 11:20 am

    • Thanks, Claudia 🙂 I enjoy your visits here very much, you always have nice, thoughtful comments 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:18 pm

  12. Love read poems and the fun with the sounds here. Y’all! My poem is about goodbye.Hope your week goes well

    September 1, 2010 at 12:19 pm

    • Thank you for giving your time to read and comment. I’m glad you liked the poem 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:34 pm

  13. a lovely flow..this read so well and seemed to fit just right.sometimes we overlook the simplest of words that can make such a great read..excellent stuff my friend..cheers pete

    September 1, 2010 at 12:26 pm

    • Thank you, Pete…I’m always glad to see you’ve stopped by and commented, it means a lot 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:36 pm

  14. Very effective onomatopoeia in your poem…it helped convey your meaning well.

    September 1, 2010 at 2:35 pm

    • Thank you, My Friend. I like that you read with thought and observation.

      September 2, 2010 at 10:40 pm

  15. Song-like and delightfully sweet! Although I hate to see hearts breaking and love gone missing 😦

    The hiss-hiss-hissing
    Of my heart still sighing
    Over love’s feather flying
    Up the sky

    🙂

    I so love the sound of your poem, Tracy!

    September 1, 2010 at 3:29 pm

    • K, you are really one of my favorite visitors…I so enjoy your romantic turn, and your humor is a delight. Thank you for befriending me…you are always a bright spot in the wee hours. 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:47 pm

  16. signed .............bkm

    Tracy I always love visiting your blog – your poetry always has something new to offer and this piece is as said before has a wonderful sound…bkm

    September 1, 2010 at 7:06 pm

    • Thank you 🙂 I’m always impressed by your work, and that makes your visits here, and your comments mean a lot. Thanks 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:50 pm

  17. I love, love, love this. The rhythm is wonderful. It feels like a heart beat-beat-beating (with love, of course).

    September 1, 2010 at 8:32 pm

    • Patti…BIG SMILES! You always make me smile with your visits and comments…I count you as my Friend 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:51 pm

  18. lifeinarecipe

    Tick Tock this poem rocks! 😉

    September 1, 2010 at 9:28 pm

    • Cindy…you are, in my book, Tops 🙂 Thank you so much for your visits. 🙂 🙂

      September 2, 2010 at 10:53 pm

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