My Irritations, Aggravations and Inspirations

October 18, 2010 “the 7”

For Poetry Potluck


“the 7”


If I am guilty of Pride…

Let it be that I swell with it when I walk into a room and you are on my arm.


If Avarice is my undoing…

Let it be my greed for the feel of your eyes upon me and the caress of your touch.


If Envy be my sin..

Let it be my jealousy for the closeness of the gloves on your hands and the intimacy of the clothes upon your body.


If Wrath is my guilt…

Let it be my anger with the gods that I cannot rest forever in your bosom, wrapped in your  loving arms.


If my fatal fault be Gluttony…

Let it be because I cannot be cured of my insatiable appetite for the taste of kisses from your soft lips.


If I am a sinner for Sloth…

Let it be that I wish to do nothing for eternity, but bask in your gaze and feel the touch of your breath on my cheek.


If Hell be my end for Lust…

Let it be my unending,ever growing, unquenchable desire for every part of everything that is you.

* * * * * * *

Without question, my forfeit is Heaven…..if these be the 7.



©tlh 10/18/10



18 responses

  1. How wonderfully you take the seven deadly sins and turn them into an expression of love and passion…excellent poem.

    October 17, 2010 at 9:02 pm

  2. Loved your take on the seven deadly sins so very much Cowboy, every single one’s very special!!….:) The yellow header takes my breath away! …Red oxo

    October 17, 2010 at 9:51 pm

  3. A wonderful surprise and beautifully refreshing angle on sin.

    October 17, 2010 at 10:07 pm

  4. Yes.. Without question, your forfeit is Heaven..
    What a beautiful take on the 7 sins..
    Absolute delight to read your words. I had leaned on my desktop resting my face in my left hand trying to hide my smile while reading this!! A sinfully sensual delight that you have shared..!!

    October 18, 2010 at 12:28 am

  5. romantic!

    October 18, 2010 at 12:36 am

  6. That is a really wonderful Love Poem. How clever, to combine the Seven Deadly sins with Romance. I don’t think he’ll mind missing out on Heaven!

    October 18, 2010 at 4:58 am

  7. very tricky and playful in the twists of the 7 sins…

    we all write a piece about it, what fun!

    hope that someday, we can do a contest and see who did better, simply kidding…

    thanks for the beautiful treat.

    October 18, 2010 at 7:50 am

  8. Impressive as always. I love how you took the “sins” and made it an amazing love poem.

    October 18, 2010 at 9:05 am

  9. I love the sensual feel of this poem. The movement is like a caress albeit through the deadly sins, but all the same a provocative piece.

    Great penning.

    October 18, 2010 at 10:11 am

  10. Oh yes, lovely! A truly beautiful take on the prompt – makes them sound anything but deadly. Thank you…

    October 18, 2010 at 10:44 am

  11. I love what you did with this! It shows the 2 sides of the coin, what attracts us to “sin” in the first place.

    October 18, 2010 at 11:27 am

  12. That is definitely some butter for your bread!

    October 18, 2010 at 1:07 pm

  13. signed .............bkm

    the depth of love and loving can be felt in each stanza and the last line sums up the forefeit to know this beautiful,romantic love…..blessings..bkm

    October 18, 2010 at 6:50 pm

  14. Amazing work! Wow, I find myself speechless, that is how good this is!

    October 19, 2010 at 4:09 am

  15. lifeinarecipe

    I felt a sense of defiance and dare to your words, feeling some relief when the lightening did not strike at the end. Awesome piece of work!

    October 19, 2010 at 8:21 am

  16. This was awesome. I love how you incorporated each of the sins and the last line is killer.


    October 19, 2010 at 6:45 pm

  17. love the twisting of the sins! great work as usual tracy!

    October 20, 2010 at 11:17 am

  18. Only you could put the love twist on this. Wonderful. Thank you. You just made my day.

    Happy Potluck! Thanks for all your work, Tracy, on Jingle Poetry. Much appreciated. 🙂

    October 21, 2010 at 10:37 pm

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